Hope everyone enjoyed my first story! Here are some more pics of Lucianna to go with it!

And some more...

Well I though the story was fine.

I certainly don't regard it is vulgar. If this is classed is vulgar, then so are all the posts talking about fingerting, etc and some of the comments.

I think the definition of vulgar is important here.

Considering this is a sex site, albeit a soft one, I think a certain degree of vulgarity should be permitted. In the case of the story, any use of vulgar lanuguage was completely appropriate within the context of the story, and if anything, quite conservative. The story was certainly not insulting or disrespectful to the model. If anything it was very complementary.

In sex stories, some vulgar language is expected and desired by the reader. So if Totem can't accept the above (which is actually quite tame IMO), then no stories of this nature are possible in this forum. In that case, perhaps the Terms and Conditions need to exclude sex stories specifically. Although, in my opinion, that would be a shame.

I do agree with @Cybervixen in the more general comments she makes. I agree that such stories would be better in a blog and perhaps listed in forum post. The problem is that there is no blogspot in the member's profile, so that is not an option in the site itself.

And by the way, a blogspot would be a great idea for the site. No only for stories, but for other things as well.

Also, I don't think all the photos were necessary and if stories are to be posted, they should really be posted in the Members Artwork section as it is a form of art.

Anyway, that is my very personal opinion on the matter for the little that is worth.

Thanks guys, my apologies for the number of pics, I just thought they would help with the readers imagination. I probably did go a bit overboard with it!

I'll look into a blog page and let you know what will happen with it.

Cheers..

@hearsz7 - As yet no one has said that stories cannot be posted.

@Cybervixen has given her opinion, which is valid and will represent the views of a section of the community. I appreciate her decision to await concensus from the other mods before banning this topic.

I think that anyone who posts works of fiction of this nature will have to accept some negative criticism, whether it be the related to the content of the story or the concept of doing such stories.

It would be nice to post stories here. But I get the feeling that this forum does not have the structure to organise them and the will to support them properly. Unfortunately, there will always be too many restrictions here.

I think that the only stories that will really be accepted here are very short ones (i.e. that can fit into one forum post) and that are not too explicit. I could be wrong though. This is just an opinion.

So the best way to do this would be a separate website specifically for vghd stories. I am too lazy and technically deficient to do it, but I would probably visit and contribute to one if it existed. Such a site could be linked the vghd site.

I think your attempt to introduce vghd fan fiction here is a worthwhile exercise. As I have said before, referring to vghd cards is a great supplement to writing sex stories as it allows the reader to visualise what the girls look like and what they are wearing. It is also potentially good marketing for vghd.

With regard to the photos, I understand what you were trying to do. In a forum with a different structure, posting several pictures of small scale would be a good idea and would have the positive effect you are trying to create. But it doesn't really work in these forums as the photos take up so much space.

Sorry but my opinion on this is that it would ***** more than help, why ?

Well, not at all that the story is not well written, it is, however, something I wouldn't go out of my way to read, but the reason for me is that it completely destroys the fantasy of the girl dancing and teasing exclusively for me, just somehow this ruins that thought.

Just my opinion though

@thegraybeard - Thankyou for posting your thoughts. Of course it's your decision not to read but one of the other reasons for me writing these stories is I look at it like the (sex) scenes you would like to see in a movie but don't happen. The models give you so much in terms of their performing on your computer, so the idea behind my stories is to write what I call "deleted scenes", the ones you don't see on your computer!

I also am trying to write the stories so that the reader is the very person in it with the model featured.

@Apasas & Cybervixen - I may look into opening up my own blog/webpage in the future in order to have more options that these forums (or the site) don't offer. My only concern I have is if I go ahead with it, would I have the permission from the VG creators & MOD's to write about their featured models and be able to use the pictures?

As far as me not wanting to read stories of this nature, it's just me, I'm sure as I always wanted the "real thing" other than a story. Call me wierd, if you will but I am one that don't search out hard porn sites too, just not my cuppa tea, not that there's anything bad about it, it's just something I don't choose to do.

Now, as far as permissions go, I think CV has covered it pretty much, mods have no say as to what leaves the site in the way of pics and stories but my take on this is that "anything any user has to pay for to get here exclusively should not be used elsewhere" These permissions would have to come from Totem staff much higher up the ladder than mods, probably Rex or Herve, and it might even be a good idea to try to get permission from the said model herself to write such stories as I am sure stories were not considered in the contract the model signed here, so this might be something to think about, just as a precaution, mind you.

If you do start that blog site, why not look in to the affiliate part of VGHD too, might as well try to make a buck from it, and too you could have the short clips and whatever the affiliate package offers to post at your site.
And no, I am not your finacial advisor, just ideas to think about, if you can get permissions for the model stories then you might as well do some advertising to go with the stories and possibly earn a few bucks .... just thinking it might be something that would work well together.